谁能帮我改正一下雅思作文语法错误，谢谢！ （这是我的雅思大作文第二段）
- 培训职业
- 2025-05-04 18:40:13
The first merit to be mentioned is that taking family with them bring positive influence to children’s (brings,influence后的to改为on)
What parents teach to the children depends children’s characteristics and future to some extent(把depends换成decides吧)
That is why in this age with fierce competition, parents have to pay much more attention to their children’s learning if their children’s learning abilities are inadequate.改为：the reason why parents should pay much more attention to their children's learning if their children feel laborious for the learning is that there is fierce competition among children in this age.
In this case, if parents leave their children alone at home, it will largely impact children’s learning , and thus they will lost. (去掉and)
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